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and I was afraid
Friday, June 19, 2009
That is you That is you Staring sullen, at the floor Before thundering up the Stairs In a flash. It is your leave And not our fight, That stung. Now that you are Upstairs, Distant Enough, Doesn’t hold me back, Doesn’t hold Them back. Red hot molten frustration Subsides into pathetic upheavals Of breath Then, Silence When I could finally bear helplessness Recognition. Reach up to cover my Fac(ad)e, only to meet Pools of weariness running dry. I touch the warm wetness that clings to my finger, Circle the drop round the rim Of red eye, Like the celebratory glass of champagne Overspill. Circle continuously, Meticulously, Til dries. The moist ghost lingers, Remains a vapour on My finger, Watery eyeshadow, Macabre mascara, I pretty myself For the picture, That is you Comments: Extremely dislike the part from "red hot molten fustration" til "running dry". Ugh -shivers- so cliche! I separated the first stanza from the second cause I initially wrote the second one first, that was my bit when I was inspired, And the first stanza was there for it to make sense. So I think the first could use a lot of help! And the second, well, is Subject to opinion. :)
11:50 PM
Yours Truly
Regular kid. Irregular fetish. "Genius is one percent inspiration, ninety-nine percent perspiration." said Thomas Alva Edison And to me, Poetry is one percent inspiration, ninety-nine percent getting lost in the moment Tagboard
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